Literacy Narrative Final Draft | |
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If you look below, you can see my rough draft and evaluations. The document below was workshopped in class, and that is why it is highlighted. If you are curious, yellow is my thesis, blue is my vivid details, orange is my topic sentences, and pink is my dialogue.
Explanation of the revisions
The main thing I had to change in my essay was the number of English variations I had. In my original essay I had four types, Simple English, Common English, Soft English, and Sweet English. In my final essay, I had to narrow it down to three types. I chose to talk about Common English, Soft English, and Sweet English. Because I took out Simple English, my essay became shorter. I then had to add a little bit more detail to meet the length requirement of 700 words. Also, in my final draft I explored the impact of my dialogue. I had to discuss what I said differently, who I was talking to, and why I had to talk differently to them.
Analysis of the Rhetorical Situation
The purpose of my essay is to demonstrate that there are different versions of English. I proved this my talking about the different types of English I use. My examples included Common English, Soft English, and Sweet English. In my essay I explained how the type of English you use depends on who you are talking to. My audience includes college students who are studying language use. This essay can help them understand how different types of English can be used everyday. The genre is Literacy Narrative. What makes it a Literacy Narrative is the usage of my own stories and dialogue. My stance is the type of English you speak depends on who to are taking to. Everyone talks differently to their parents, friends, strangers, and even pets. Last, my media is a printed academic essay in MLA format.
Evaluation
I feel that the strength of this essay was getting my point across. If you were to read my essay, I believe that understanding and comprehending it would not be a problem. However, my weakness would be my awkward wording. I know what I want to say, but I have a difficult time putting it on paper. I went to a tutor to get some help with that. They were able to help me change a couple of things, but I still need to improve the way I word my sentences.
The main thing I had to change in my essay was the number of English variations I had. In my original essay I had four types, Simple English, Common English, Soft English, and Sweet English. In my final essay, I had to narrow it down to three types. I chose to talk about Common English, Soft English, and Sweet English. Because I took out Simple English, my essay became shorter. I then had to add a little bit more detail to meet the length requirement of 700 words. Also, in my final draft I explored the impact of my dialogue. I had to discuss what I said differently, who I was talking to, and why I had to talk differently to them.
Analysis of the Rhetorical Situation
The purpose of my essay is to demonstrate that there are different versions of English. I proved this my talking about the different types of English I use. My examples included Common English, Soft English, and Sweet English. In my essay I explained how the type of English you use depends on who you are talking to. My audience includes college students who are studying language use. This essay can help them understand how different types of English can be used everyday. The genre is Literacy Narrative. What makes it a Literacy Narrative is the usage of my own stories and dialogue. My stance is the type of English you speak depends on who to are taking to. Everyone talks differently to their parents, friends, strangers, and even pets. Last, my media is a printed academic essay in MLA format.
Evaluation
I feel that the strength of this essay was getting my point across. If you were to read my essay, I believe that understanding and comprehending it would not be a problem. However, my weakness would be my awkward wording. I know what I want to say, but I have a difficult time putting it on paper. I went to a tutor to get some help with that. They were able to help me change a couple of things, but I still need to improve the way I word my sentences.